It has been four years ever since John had last tasted Singapore food. These four full years had nearly driven him crazy. Now, after these four years of waiting and hoping, John was finally back in Singapore. Although still being a developing country, John still felt that my homeland- Singapore was much better than America. Although the sudden separation from Malaysia had deeply affected the country, this did not affect his happy mood to return to his place of birth.
John left Singapore for further education in America in 1963. He had never forgotten his homeland. Now that his studies are done, John had no hesitation in returning to Singapore. “ . I am a Singaporean.” John never forgets to introduce his homeland to the friends he made in America. “America might be good and a great country to live in, but nothing is better than Singapore.” John never doubts this.
John stilled remembered how his family forced him to study overseas to avoid getting caught for owning drugs after discovering that John was addicted to drugs. In these four years, John had grown more mature and the western education had educated him to be a western gentleman.
Upon stepping on the ground of Singapore, John rushed back to his home. He did not tell his family about his return to Singapore. He did not have the money to call them. Neither did he send a letter as he knew that by the time the letter reached his parents, he would have reached in Singapore.
John really regretted breaking the laws when he was young. Only one wrong decision led to this outcome. In America, the whites with blonde hair discriminated him as “dumb” because of his religion. It had really been hard years for John.
John’s friend in America helped him to make faked passport and identification card. He knew that if he didn’t make them, he would be caught reaching by the police upon landing on Singapore.
“Mum!” John pressed on the door bell, controlling his urge to shout out in happiness. However, his mood soon changed as h realized that no one was in the house. John went to the neighbors and only to realize that his family had moved away. It was really shocking to coming to know that his own family had abandoned him.
“No!” John could not believe this.
John wandered on the streets of Chinatown, those familiar feelings and the crowds that he had been so much for was nothing to John now. All those could not extinguish the fire in John’s heart. He was so angry that his family being so irresponsible.
It took John another year to overcome this feeling and in this one year, John had grown from an “old” teenager into a matured man. He had forgiven his family as he himself knew what trouble he had caused for them. He heard from friends that his family was chased after by loan sharks that he borrowed money from to buy drugs and policemen finding for him. His family actually was saving him by staying away from him.
From the clerk to the managing director was a long journey. John worked hard to get it. He got married and had a wonderful family. One day, there was a slight knock on the door. John opened the door and was stunned. In front of him were his long lost parents! The old couple did not really realize that this young millionaire was their son. They just came here to beg for some food to survive. “Mum! Dad! ”
The family was reunion again finally. It ended with another knock on the door. As John went to open the door, he did not know that what waiting for him outside would cause him two years in the jail and loses his family again.
(I did this in an hour so the standards might not meet)
Just to note, you have some grammatical errors. I feel that you did not really bring out the theme of 'becoming' or 'identity' of a Singaporean. However, I feel you have put in effort in coming out with this short story. One thing I feel is that this story is rather sad as after so many years, the family were reunion but just because of one knock on the door and they were separated again. Then again, you have brought out the setting very well, stating that this essay was during the time period of the 1960s. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI understand the message that you are trying to convey throughout the whole story, that is your character is a patriot of Singapore. This sticks closely to the theme" identity" which makes the content of your story apt and good. This story would be great if some expression errors can be corrected.
ReplyDeleteActually, after seeing FuMan's comment, I see the link to the theme, as stated "identity".
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